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The Tanist: A poem for two voices

I have written a poem, and I am trying to do a particular thing. I want to set up two voices, which work separately or combined. If I was doing it out loud at a poetry reading I would get two people to speak the lines alternately. The idea is that the reader/listener has to run the two strands in parallel, and also combine them, and this way there are three different poems running in and out of each other. I'm trying to force the brain to do parallel processing.

The poem is called 'The Tanist' but I don't know if that is too obscure a title.

1. In Xanadu

You'll hear my voice
On the wind
In Xanadu
Woman wailing
For her demon lover
Across the sand
Black barren land
The caves of ice
Slow moving thighs
Indifferent beak
He may not speak
The silent falconer
He flies
In time


2. My boyfriend's back

Did I call you?
Out of nothing
Out of the desert
'Do Not Be'
The Winter King
Be my worse half
Fertilise the fields
In blood
Tear me apart
Scatter my body
Unmake me
He makes me
As one
With everything

I'm using HTML to try to format it the way I want to see it. I hope it works on your computer.


The Tanist: A poem for two voices
In Xanadu
My boyfriend's back

You'll hear my voice
Did I call you?

On the wind
Out of nothing

In Xanadu
Out of the desert

Woman wailing
'Do Not Be'

For her demon lover
The Winter King

Across the sand
Be my worse half

Black barren land
Fertilise the fields

The caves of ice
In blood

Slow moving thighs
Tear me apart

Indifferent beak
Scatter my body

He may not speak
Unmake me

The silent falconer
He makes me

He flies
As one

In time
With everything

I know I shouldn't try to explain what a poem is doing but I'd welcome comments on whether this is even possible.
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